I have no clue if my essay is decent

<p>so i'm an international student and my school has probably had about 4 students apply to the US since it opened 50 years ago. </p>

<p>I feel really intimidated and stressed out by the whole process of uni applications and I have no idea if my essay is on the right track. I've been told that I should write about something impressive and moving, but mine seems a little weak and boring. Grammar and diction aren't big problems, the thing I'm most worried about the the overall effect and meaning. </p>

<p>can you guys help me out? (:</p>

<p>Im willing to help. Graduating in '10.
Just PM me.</p>

<p>shameless bump!</p>