<p>Lol, like the title says, I would like you to grade my essay out of 6 please. I finished this in 23 minutes. Any suggestions, constructive criticism and anything else is appreciated. This is exactly what I wrote, no changes.</p>
<p>PROMPT: Do changes that make our lives easier not necessarily make them better?</p>
<p>I the journey of mankind, finding simpler, economical solutions has been a determining factor of our identity as a species. Mankind, as a whole, has always found convoluted ways of simplifying our otherwise hectic lives. However, such inventions may be more of a curse than a blessing. As childhood obesity grows at an alarming rate, as the Internet and World Wide Web has a subordinating influence on our lives, and as greenhouse emitions soar, we must reconsider the statement that change has made our lives easier.</p>
<p>There has never been a period in our history that obesity, especially childhood obesity, has reached such heights. Such a prominent issue in our society can be traced to its roots in the fast food industry, video gaming industry, and to other apparent changes that were meant to make our lives easier and more enjoyable. Fast food chains were meant, back in the day, to be a place to relax with family and get mom out of the kitchen. However, meal sizes and fat contents have risen exponentially. The growing love for fast food and its apparent convenience has simply added fuelts to the fire. What was once a way to simply enjoy a meal with family and avoid cooking has led to a global crisis. North American, especially, face grave dangers with obesity as 1/4 children are obese (**not sure of this stat, i think i heard this somewhere..and this stuff in brackets was not in my essay).</p>
<p>Furthermore, the Internet was once a method to exchange information and research among academics, but has now grown in popularity. It is now an unreplaceable part of our lives. Social networking sites, gaimng sites, and even pornography have consumed our lives. What was a way to gather information quickly and efficiently has turned into an addiction for all the wrong reasons. The Internet is a reason for poor student success in some families, while it has led to less family time in other households. It has led us to a point where it is a barrier. It is no longer a means t solely obtain information, but is now a place which is filled wit corrupt, disturbing, and dangerous information.</p>
<p>The automobile is a fine means of locomotion. From getting us where we want to go with ease to being a means of showing off our wealth, they are great. However, pollution from automobiles has led us to a global warming crisis where greenhouse gases are in surplus in our atmosphere, trapping excess heat. We are now faced with the daunting task of reversing the trends or face what may be one of the greatest mass extinctions that our history has witnessed.</p>
<p>In conclusion, technology and change have freed up time for us to pursue leisure (this doesn't even make sense, does it?), but they have made our lives and lifestyles significantly worse. We may be at a point in humanity, where change has been a detriment and put our way of life in jeopardy.</p>
<p>***My conclusion is very weak. How do i strengthen it? And my intro. is only half decent.</p>