I made a resume today!!

Chance Me / Match Me!
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<p>**Quick Info: Hey guys, I'm a junior and I want to get into an ivy and basically succeed in life. But hey, everyone does. The problem is, I'm not the BEST.. I do so much random stuff.. but I don't have perfect sat scores.. (I haven't taken it yet, but my practice tests are always around 2100).. I am not valedictorian (more like 20/304), and I don't know what college/major I'm going to have. Right now, the Wharton School at Penn looks really good right now, but I'm not going to get in.. =P My main interests: Violin, Debate, Business..
Ok ok, comment!
Resume:</p>

<p>Academic Honors
· Distinguished Honor Role (9, 10, 11)
· Honors Placement: English, Modern World History, Geometry Plus, Pre-Calculus/Calculus A, String Ensemble
· Advanced Placement: AB Calculus, Biology, U.S. History
· National Honor Society member (11)</p>

<p>Honors and Recognition
· Bucks County Playhouse Drama Award – “Special Recognition” (10)
· Future Business Leaders of America (FBLA) Competition
- First Place in Public Speaking I at Regional Competition (10)
- Thirteenth Place in Public Speaking I at State Competition (10)
- First Place – “Best Presentation” in Entrepreneurship at Penn State Conference (11)
· Ivy League Model United Nations – “Most Peppy” award (10)
· PMEA District 12 Orchestra: Violin (9, 10, 11)
· PMEA Region 6 Orchestra: Violin (10)
· Published in Adagio Literary Magazine (10,11)
· Invited to National Youth Leadership Conference in Washington (11)
· Pennsylvania Young Performer’s Orchestra– soloist - “Special Recognition” (9)</p>

<p>School Activities
·Orchestra (9,10,11)
- Concert Mistress (10, 11)
- Performed at Disney World (9)
- Perform in community concerts in Winter and Spring
·Honors Strings (9, 10, 11)
- Concert Mistress (10, 11)
- Classic Festivals 2005: Performed in Quebec (10)
- Psychedelic” Keyboard Summit with Vince Welnick, Bob Bralove, Tom Constanten (10)
- Perform for American Institute for CPCU luncheon
·Chamber Singers (Honors): Violin Accompanist (10, 11)
·String Quartet: First violin (10)
- Organized the quartet and found the music
- Performed at Malvern Victorian Christmas
- Perform for American Institute for CPCU luncheon
·Musical Performer at Great Valley Spring Arts Festival (9, 10)
·Musical Performer at Great Valley Baccalaureate Ceremony (10)
·Adagio Literary Magazine (9, 10, 11)
- Editor
·Drama Guild (9, 10, 11)
- Fall Drama Cast Member/Violinist (10, 11)
- "Dark of the Moon"
- "Midsummer’s Night Dream"
- Spring Musical Pit Orchestra Member (9, 10)
- Concert Mistress (10)
- "The Most Happy Fella
- " South Pacific"
·Future Business Leaders of America (FBLA) (10, 11)
- Corresponding Secretary (11)
- Competed in the Regional and State Competitions (10, 11)
- Attended the Penn State Conference and Competition (10, 11)
- Chair of Decoration Committee and MC/Host of the Great Valley Pumpkin Carving Contest
- Ran a booth at Homecoming, Club Night, and PHY Extravaganza (10, 11)
·Junior State of America (JSA Debate Club) (11)
- Founder and President (11)
- Acquired permission from Student Council, Club Director, and found a Teacher Advisor and officers
- Led workshops on how to debate
- Organized Competitive Events - Spring Regional
·World Affairs Club/Model UN (9, 10, 11)
- Delegate at Yale Model United Nations (9)
- Delegate at Ivy League Model United Nations (ILMUNC) (10, 11)
·Women in Science and Engineering (WISE) (9, 10, 11)
- Secretary (11)
- Teach scientific experiments and act as a guide on Science Night in May (9, 10)
- Organize booth at Homecoming, Club Night, and PHY Extravaganza (10, 11)
- Organized Cotton Candy for fundraising efforts (11)
·Interact Club (9)</p>

<p>Outside School Activities
·Pennsylvania Young Performer’s Orchestra (PYPO) - (9,10,11)
- First violinist
- Perform and tour Spain (9 - summer)
·“Camp Business” at Drexel University and Commerce University (10 – summer)
- Compete in a business simulation, examine the disciplines of accounting, marketing, finance and management, and learn the core concepts of business including leadership, professional image, etiquette, team building, and strategy.
- In addition, learned about the resources essential to business such as technology, the stock market and The Wall Street Journal.
·Relay for Life (10, 11)
- am member (10, 11)
·Chester County Youth Leadership Program (CCYLP) (11)
- Attend workshops focused on economics, communications, leadership, government, politics, social services, and business.
·Private Violin lessons (9-11)</p>

<p>Volunteer Activities
·Sunrise Assisted Living in Paoli (10, 11)
- Read stories, call out bingo, help with crossword puzzles, teach arts and crafts, talk to, walk with, and visit seniors.
- Volunteer 50 hours in summer
·Service Club for Ms. Barben (10, 11)
- Grade papers, peer tutor, and make power points
- Volunteer 2 hours a week
·Relay for Life (10, 11)
· Pennsylvania Home of the Sparrow (10)
- Waitress at the Jazz Auction and Dinner
·Homework Club/Warwick Day Care at District Elementary Schools (9)
·Peer Tutoring – (10, 11)
- Tutor in Spanish and Math
- Tutor 2 hours a week
·Sunday School Teacher – (9)
- Teach 1st and 2nd graders
- Teach 1 hour every Sunday
·Church Youth Theatre Director – (10,11)
- Edit and Direct the Christmas and Easter plays
o The Christmas Carol
o What is Easter?
o The Christmas Shoes</p>

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<p>Hey guys.. sorry that's soo long.. yeesh</p>

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<p>Dude trim all that stuff down! If an EC isnt special, take it off!</p>

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<p>Haha.. duuuude
I just copied and pasted from my personal computer..
I gotta beef it up.. =P
I'm applying to gov. school (Global Entrepreneurship) so I just started typing today..</p>

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<p>If you're sending resume to colleges, leave off the "honors placement" and AP stuff... they'll see that on the transcript.</p>

<p>Leave out the thirteenth place thing under FBLA competition... while it may have been impressive at the actual competition, the two first place awards overshadow it (also... maybe you could group those 2 awards in one bullet to make things shorter). It also looks like the "Most Preppy" award isn't as important... and you say you were "Invited to National Youth Leadership Conference" but if you didn't actually go, I'd leave that off too.</p>

<p>For the school activities, you can leave out a ton of small or obscure events. Like under orchestra, "Perform in community concerts in Winter and Spring", instead you could leave that out and just write the number of hours you spend in orchestra in general. Keep only the most important events rather than listing them all (since there are obviously a lot) and don't put in extra details that aren't as necessary.</p>

<p>Instead of listing each play you have been involved with with drama guild by name, just list how many there have been and the number of approximate hours.</p>

<p>I would also leave out things like "Delegate at Yale Model United Nations (9)" because there are other similar events and you only did this in 9th. Keep things you did later in high school, or ones from 9th that are very important, or things you started in 9th and continued. Things like "Interact Club (9)" don't add much so they are better off not being there.</p>

<p>For JSA, leave out "Acquired permission from Student Council, Club Director, and found a Teacher Advisor and officers". Just tell them you were in it, no need to tell them how you founded it.</p>

<p>"·Relay for Life (10, 11)
- am member (10, 11)" is a bit awkward, change it to something like "Relay For Life (Member, 10,11). On a side note, I think lots of people do relay for life and unless you were majorly involved in setting it up or such it is not something that should be mentioned on a resume at all.</p>

<p>"Compete in a business simulation, examine the disciplines of accounting, marketing, finance and management, and learn the core concepts of business including leadership, professional image, etiquette, team building, and strategy.
- In addition, learned about the resources essential to business such as technology, the stock market and The Wall Street Journal."
No need to list all these things... they'll get the same message if you say "Competed in simulation involving aspects, resources and core concepts of business."</p>

<p>"·Peer Tutoring – (10, 11)
- Tutor in Spanish and Math
- Tutor 2 hours a week" Change these 3 lines to something more like: "Peer Tutoring in Spanish/Math - (10, 11, 2 hours/week)"</p>

<p>Whew... well hope that helps.</p>

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<p>Thanks so much!!!
But just a quick question.. If I were applying to gov school, especially Global Entrepreneurship, wouldn't I really want to emphasize the Camp Business aspect? Like all of the business classes I took.. shouldn't I elaborate?
But overall, you are extremely helpful..
and you get major props for reading all of that!</p>

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<p>LOL, you don't want to put "Most Peppy" on your resume...it's kind of unprofessional...</p>

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Academic Honors
· Distinguished Honor Role (9, 10, 11)
· Honors Placement: English, Modern World History, Geometry Plus, Pre-Calculus/Calculus A, String Ensemble
· Advanced Placement: AB Calculus, Biology, U.S. History
· National Honor Society member (11)

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<p>Omit all that.</p>

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Interact Club (9)

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<p>Omit that.</p>

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<p>Hehehe..
yeah, sorry it's such a messy resume. I pretty much dragged out every little detail..</p>

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<p>And Coquettish.. I know "most peppy" doesn't sound professional.. but I definitely don't have enough awards and I need something from Model UN.. even though it was just a committee award for fun..
i dont' know.. do you all agree that I should take it off?</p>

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<p>I don't know...I don't really have very many specific awards either...just lots of honors societies. I do think it's superfluous information, however...</p>

<p>I don't think you should omit Interact Club...I thought resumes were supposed to list everything one is involved in.</p>

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<p>Not everything... only the most important ones. And Interact doesn't seem to be one of venus's more important activities. The point of a resume is to make you seem appealing, not to make the reader fall asleep. That's accomplished by selecting only what will make you seem like a better candidate.</p>

<p>As for awards, it's better to list a few good awards rather than a lot that don't mean as much. Same with everything else.</p>

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<p>Don't worry so much about "beefing up" your resume! It could work against you, i.e. it seems that you're adding negligible items because you have no major meaningful activities.</p>

<p>Instead, focus on a few that a) you have spent a lot of time on or b) you have won a <em>significant</em> award in. If you don't want to leave something out, but it IS important to you (like that PEER TUTORING thing), just group it together with something else (like under your Service Club or whatnot).</p>

<p>And to contradict Coquettish, I think you should leave off "Interact Club" because you didn't even list anything under it. Seeing as how you listed every LITTLE thing you did in all the other clubs, but have nothing in this, it's obviously not important at all. And no, don't "list everything one is involved in".</p>

<p>Overall, you might feel pained to raze off the length of your resume, but it will be better. You might have to leave off many activities, but don't cry over "not getting credit for it". I do admit - I did not read every word of your resume. It's not because of the length of it - if it were long and meaningful, I would pore over it - but rather how (I'm sorry) insignificant many lines are. But it's okay. It's still early for you.</p>

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<p>Okay, I'll take your advice.
I'm definitely taking Interact Club off and I'll make things more concise. But do you think I should take off all the places that I've performed at for Orchestra/Hrs Strings?? I think that's significant, but now it seems wordy.. but dude, I played with the Grateful Dead keyboardists! haha, that was a life altering experience!
But thank you so much for the advice! keep it coming!</p>