i need critiques..

<p>my essay has a quiet creative introduction..
I'm not sure if it's good though..
Anyone, willing to have a look at it & give critiques?</p>

<p>send it to me if you want to. but i am applying regular to colleges as well.</p>

<p>i will read it.</p>

<p>pm it over.. i'll take a look and comment</p>

<p>I can take a look.</p>

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