<p>Helo all, </p>
<p>When I first wrote this essay I must admit that I was very satisfied with what I wrote. Mainly it was because it spoke well about me and why I choose that paticular college. But now as I read the contents of the essay, I seem to develop something from the previous paragraph in the following sentence and that goes on like that till I feel that my essay lacks focus. I really tried editing it but I can't do much to the point that I'm posting this thread to ask for help. </p>
<p>Please anyone, can you help me out? I would appreciate if seniors would help me. Thanks!!</p>