<p>I’m not an AO, but agree with MEME. Be careful, beauty is in the eye of the beholder. What one school thinks is great, another may think abhorable. I think Conn College posts some sample essays of admitted students as models, but frankly, I thought they were overly descriptive and not good writing. I imagine even within the same college, there is a rang of inter-rater reliability. I think the best advice is to keep personal, writing something you care deeply about, make sure the grammar and punctuation are proper, and make sure your own voice comes through. It’s your opportunity to tell the AOs in your own words what you want them to know that your grades and SAT scores can’t. Then, hope for the best. Hope someone can see what you might bring and how you might contribute to their class.</p>