<p>Hi, iHateMyClass</p>
<p>I disagree that this essay does not speak to your character. Finding the strength to persevere when you are homeless and so young speaks volumes about who you are. Your writing is descriptive, and I’m drawn in by your vivid first paragraph. What I do suggest is some more about your transformation. How did you take control of your life? How has home improved? What motivated you to do well in school? With a bit more about how you came to your epiphany that adversity cannot defeat you but only makes you more determined, I think this would be a stellar essay. You’re off to a great start!</p>