I think my essay is too risky to submit - critique my essay and tell me if it is?

<p>Hi there! Recently I've just finished an essay in response to the UC #2 prompt, the one about the quality, experience, etc. that is important to you. It's definitely different, but I've had three negative feedbacks and one positive feedback (from experienced school staff) to my essay so I 'm worried that I need to write about a completely different topic.</p>

<p>I'd appreciate it if you can read and critique my essay! HS graduates only please. :)</p>

<p>Send it ,</p>