I'm having trouble writing my essay

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I’m applying to Temple University as a transfer student. For my personal statement, I want to talk about my experience in starting college full time in my senior year of high school, a year prior to graduation. I learned so much from my experience: I matured academically, I developed beneficial time management skills, I learned to make my schoolwork my top priority, I learned to be more confident because in college you can be yourself. But I feel like I can’t explain why I developed all of these qualities, because they all just clicked for me. So how can I write my essay?

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<p>Provide personal details so that the essay becomes something that only you could write.</p>

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These responsibilities made me grow and mature not only academically, but also personally.

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<p>As it is, anyone could say this. There are no details that could make the essay personal, set you apart. A reasonable reader wonders: what responsibilities? What do you mean by grow? What do you mean by mature? What do you mean by growing personally? Maybe you think these words are obvious; I don’t. Your readers want to know what growing and maturing Cheshire Cat did, <a href=“s”>i</a>he alone*. They don’t want to consider what grow and mature means in the context of thousands of students.</p>

<p>Readers want personal details! </p>

<p>Check out these resources:</p>

<p>[Essays</a>, Admission Information, Undergraduate Admission, U.Va.](<a href=“http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html]Essays”>http://www.virginia.edu/undergradadmission/writingtheessay.html)</p>

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