<p>Hi,</p>
<p>I'm transferring to a college, and I would love some feedback on my essay:</p>
<pre><code>Have you ever been unsure about something? It's an absolutely unnerving feeling when you're sitting there, knowing that you have made the wrong choice, or even wondering if your decision was the right one. The gnawing little feeling that just seems to fill up your insides and makes you want to run the other way. That's the feeling that haunted me throughout high school. I ended up going to a prestigious, private school because it was the best school for me. It absolutely wasn't! The people there did not share my views on life, or should I say my passion for life? That is why after I high school I spent time trying to figure out what on earth was going to become of me. Should I study medicine, law, international relations? There was a lot to go through, especially when I was so busy making the most of my life. I spent my time working and traveling abroad. As soon as my bank balance would allow it, I fled the country. I visited exotic places, large cities, and great countries. I felt alive, and after my year was up, I wasn't quite finished with my adventures. I traveled to El Salvador the summer of 2008 and worked as an English teacher for less fortunate children. It was a life altering experience. I cam back that autumn and started college part-time. I applied myself to the courses I was taking, as well as work, and also volunteering at a homeless shelter.
Then, over this past Christmas it hit me. I wanted to study abroad. I looked up colleges, searched for something that was me! I did not look for prestige or fancy impressive names. I looked for good colleges that were committed to their students. Colleges where the students were happy, and where everyone said I couldn't see myself going anywhere else!. I found that college in (state name). You might have heard of it... it goes by the name of ........ (school name) seemed like the perfect fit, and when I sent in my application I was certain it was the right thing to do. Have you ever had THAT feeling? That feeling of know that it's right? It's glorious!
I am certain that I would fit into your school. I am a driven person, happy and giving. I strive to make a difference, and although I'm not an applicant with straight A's, I feel there is one A that I have that they don't. I have an A in determination. I hope that you will not keep me in suspense too long and that I'll hear back from you soon enough.
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got my acceptance yesterday</p>