is anyone on? I have a quick question about my essay

<p>Essays are due tonight and i got a quick question about my common app transfer essay.
*Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.</p>

<p>I open up my essay talking about how everyone is fearing the future in my highschool. After that, i say why everyone is scared (school did not place that much importance on its academic portfolio). Another reason is constant tensions between crews or gangs. I was involved in this for my first two years, but would i mention that and state that i tried making the most of my last 2 years or would i still focus on why the student body feared the future after graduation?</p>

<p>I later will move onto how in college, when i was hired as a math tutor i began to just straighten out and get serious.</p>

<p>WOOOOOOH, i finally finished the essay. Can someone please proof-read it and find some errors i don’t see? Unfortunately, grammar is not my strong point :(</p>

<p>I can try to help if you want. PM me if it isn’t too late.</p>

<p>PM me if you want another proof reader. :-)</p>