Is my Common App essay good enough for top colleges?

<p>Hey everybody, I'm looking at some pretty tough LACs (Occidental, Colorado College, Whitman), and I decided to write about my passion for walking, which I believe fits under topic of your choice. I'm just worried that it's not good enough for these schools, so if anyone can offer some editorial advice and just give my essay a look and tell me if it's any good, that'd be greatly appreciated!</p>