Hello,
I feel like my essay has 3 main problems : 1- I feel like it is somewhat incoherent. 2- I believe that my dreams of grandeur make me sound narcissistic,3- i feel that the whole topic is a bit risky,
Please notify me if you are available
If it’s incoherent to you, it will be more so to someone else.
You don’t want to come across as delusional, that’s a no-no.
What the heck, I’ll take a look at your essay if you’d like.
Does your essay “give them a reason to say yes” to your application??
If not, then it needs to be revised.
If so, then send it.
I’m available if you want another perspective!
Huge thanks to @OnMyWay2013 for her kind help.
I would appreciate it if anybody else were to spare the time to read my essay , so that I could have one more perspective before sending my common essay.
I can check it out, give you some feedback.
ill read
@bsroxmysox thanks for the offer, but since you are a student like me, I will have to turn it down
@osnappu thank you too, but you are new to the site and I can’t find any evidence that makes me feel comfortable with sending my essays to you. Sorry, especially since I am almost certain that you want to help, but I can’t risk it.
I would be happy to read and comment if you like
I’m finally caught up on my grading. I’ll be happy to take a look at it.
OK, big thanks to everybody. Especially @bkjmom, @3puppies and @OnMyWay2013. I believe that all my problems have been addressed / are being addressed by these kind people.
@jamicbeaton sorry, I can’t trust you
I’ll read!