I’m writing this letter in regard to my financial aid suspension. At the time of my poor academics in question I found out my dad, who was in Indonesia since the beginning of my Spring 2016 semester, had health problems but wasn’t sure what was wrong until late August. Not only was I concerned about his health, but the fact he was in a third world country with terrible medical care caused me stress over his poor condition. Due to his contract, he was not allowed to back home to get the proper medical care until his allotted time was up. For the past 4 months he struggled with his health and was diagnosed with (Congestive Heart Failure) which in terms caused me great stress throughout the semester. My dad returned back to states on Dec.2 and on December 5 was admitted into ICU for which hindered my ability to study for my finals during that week.
Achieving Satisfactory Progress:
Now that my father is back at home where he can get the care he needs for his illness, I feel that I will not have to stress and worry about his health now. I am confident that I will be able to improve my academic progress by making an change with time management using the assignment planner on the Valdosta website to keep me on track. I will also while maintain a higher GPA by making effective use of the student success center’s workshops and speaking with my professors regularly for any extra help that is needed.
So is your dad really better now? You just mentioned he was in intensive care with heart failure on Dec. 5. Contrary to what you say in the first sentence of the last paragraph, I assume you will still worry and be stressed. I would say instead that while you still are concerned about his health, knowing that he is getting better care will allow you to better focus on your studies in the next semester.
Statement of Appeal:
I’m writing this letter in regard to my financial aid suspension. At the time of my poor academics in question I found out my father, who was in Indonesia since the beginning of my Spring 2016 semester, had health problems and wasn’t sure what was wrong until late August. Not only was I concerned about his health, but also the fact he was overseas in a country with substandard medical care which caused me to stress over his poor condition. Due to his contract, he was not allowed to back home to get the proper medical care until his allotted time was up. For the past 4 months he struggled with his health and was diagnosed with Congestive Heart Failure which in terms caused me great stress throughout the semester. My father returned back to the U.S. on Dec.2 and on December 5 was admitted into the ICU for his condition. With such horrible news I was unable to properly study my finals during that week.
Achieving Satisfactory Progress:
While I still am still concerned about his health, knowing that he is getting better care will allow me to better focus on my studies in the next semester. In my previous semester I went to the student success center for tutoring and I will continue this process this semester to further improve my grades. My GPA will improve by making an change with time management using the assignment planner on the Valdosta website to keep me on track. Although I was unable to speak with my professors last semester due to scheduling conflicts, changes will be made this semester so I can get any extra help needed.
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This will be unacceptable to the Financial aid team. You were having personal family problems with your father’s congestive heart failure and your grades were tanking, yet, you were NEVER able to verbalize this information to any of your professors or GA’s via email? text? department notes?
Scheduling conflicts affected your ability to email?
I wish to appeal the suspension of my financial aid. At the time of my poor academics in question I found out my father, who was in Indonesia since the beginning of my Spring 2016 semester, had health problems and wasn’t sure what was wrong until late August. Not only was I concerned about his health, but also the fact he was overseas in a country with substandard medical care which caused me to stress over his poor condition. Due to his contract, he was not allowed to travel back home to get the proper medical care until his allotted time was up. For the past 4 months he struggled with his health and was finally diagnosed with Congestive Heart Failure. My father returned back to the U.S. on Dec.2 and on December 5 was admitted into the ICU for his condition. With such horrible news I was unable to properly study my finals during that week.
Achieving Satisfactory Progress:
While I still am still concerned about his health, knowing that he is getting better care will allow me to better focus on my studies in the next semester. In my previous semester I went to the student success center for tutoring and I will continue this process this semester to further improve my grades. My GPA will improve by making an change with time management using the assignment planner on the Valdosta website to keep me on track. Finally I will continue to discuss with my professors how to best achieve the highest grade for their courses.
I wish to appeal the suspension of my financial aid. At the time of my poor academics [DELETED] I found out my father, who was in Indonesia since the beginning of my Spring 2016 semester, had health problems. We did not find out the cause of his illness until late August. Not only was I concerned about his health, but also the fact he was overseas in a developing country with substandard medical care, which caused me to stress over his poor condition. Due to the terms of his employment contract, he was not allowed to leave work until the end of his contract. For the past 4 months he struggled with his health and was finally diagnosed with Congestive Heart Failure. My father returned back to the U.S. on Dec. 2. On Dec. 5 he was admitted into the ICU [DELETED]. With such horrible news I was unable to properly focus on studying for my final exams
Achieving Satisfactory Progress:
While I still am still concerned about his health, knowing that he is getting better care has allowed me to better focus on my studies [DELETED]. In the last semester, I have begun going to the student success center for tutoring, and I will continue this process [DELETED] to further improve my grades. My time management will improve by using the assignment planner on the Valdosta website to keep me on track. Finally I will continue to discuss with my professors how to best achieve the highest grade for their courses.