<p>I have already written my essay and I think its very good. My only fear is that the topic it self is too clich</p>
<p>I’m not an expert, but I think your topic is just fine. I think as long is you relate it to one of your passions or a learning experience you won’t have any problems.</p>
<p>in my honest opinion that DOES sound way too cliche. unless your essay REALLY grabs the readers attention id stick with it. but if its your typical “she/he changed my life and now I look at the world different” I wouldn’t use it. you want to write about something that no1 would think to write about. something unique.</p>
<p>I think people focus so much on coming up with a fantastic unique idea to the point that the essay loses its genuineness. As long as you are able to write your essay to show how that person truly affected you without making it dramatic, it doesn’t matter what your topic is. AO’s will see right through a fake essay.</p>
<p>No matter what, just make sure that your essay reveals something about yourself. Make the readers learn about you and want to get to know you better.</p>
<p>I personally would be very cautious with this topic; I agree that it is rather trite and I think that usually, if you’re going to write about some famous person, then it’d better be because you’d talked to them before. However, if you have a truly original voice and take on this topic, then it could be a great essay.</p>
<p>as long as it’s written well and conveys some type of message about yourself, i think it’ll be fine</p>
<p>Just remember that the point of your essay is to sell yourself. Your admiration for someone else does not make YOU admirable. You can start off with how you admire someone, but in the end you have to bring the essay back to you and what you have done that is significant.</p>
<p>I should also mention that my major will most likely be International Relations/Political science and that stems from her and the conflict in Burma. So the essay is mainly about me, not her. It just starts off with her because she is the one who inspired me. No where does it say “I see the world in a different way.” I have always seen it in the same way, she just helped me focus my energy on what I need to do and how to do it. </p>
<p>Does that sound too cliche??</p>
<p>I am sorry, I can’t stop obsessing about it being cliche!!!</p>
<p>I went so far as to acknowledge that this is “another inspirtation essay” but that hopefully I can convince them otherwise.</p>
<p>It will be what you think it is, and that will show in the writing. If you really think it is that cliche, write another essay and compare!!!</p>
<p>I didn’t really read the last thing you said, I don’t think it’s a good idea to acknowledge that, you need a much more interesting introduction.</p>
<p>Ohh that wasnt my exact wording at all, and that wasnt my intro.</p>
<p>It seems like you believe in your ability to write a good essay on this – so write it. You’ll have time later to have people read it over and edit it, and if it really doesn’t work you can write another one. Just be sure to start now.</p>
<p>Considering your major, and how this is a very current event in light of her most recent “trial,” I think your topic is just fine. Stop worrying if it’s cliche or not and just write from the heart. </p>
<p>And @pokesurfer, she’s not Vietnamese, she’s Burmese.</p>
<p>It is the most sincere thing I have ever written but I am afraid that admissions will just see it as another essay :(</p>
<p>I think that you should write from yoir heart. And if the topic you write about is genuine, then you will be fine.</p>
<p>Sometimes, in an effort to be different, students write essays that try too hard and come off as phony. It is very hard to come up with a topic that is brand new and unique…and it probably wouldn’t matter that much if you did. Write about what feels comfortable to you and shows you off as a real person. If you write with a strong voice, you will have done a good job.</p>
<p>Go have it read over by an english teacher you like, and family and friends who will be honest with you about it.</p>
<p>even if the topic does come off as cliche… just MAKE SURE your voice really shines through. that’s the most important part.</p>