Is this a good answer?

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<p>I'm applying to NYU and I was asked why I would want to go to the NYU in New York. I had a lot to say but I only have 700 characters. Is it good enough? Do I need more details? here it is:</p>

<pre><code> Kid Cudi once said “You sometimes think we want to disappear, but all you really want is to be found.” I’m weary of being limited by all my childish fears. During the night I become aware of everything missing in my life. I acquire a feeling of nostalgia and solitude towards who I am, where I come from, and where I want to be. I have always had a necessity to be around those who are different than me. New York can offer me the opportunity to be a part of their rich cultural lifestyle and I can offer my eagerness to change not only my life but that of others as well. Although I might want to disappear at times, I know that New York is where I can be found.
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<p>First of all, are you sure you want to be quoting kid cudi? Secondly, check your grammar. You left out a word in the sentence about feeling nostalgia.</p>

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<p>Thank you.</p>

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<p>Also, there are so many schools in NYC, why NYU? Shouldn’t you make it more personal to the school itself?</p>

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<p>That makes a lot of sense. Once again thank you, I’ve been finding it very difficult to stand out and still maintain to be myself.</p>

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<p>There are references to New York that would still make sense if you changed New York by NYU.</p>

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<p>Personally I would not use part of such a shot answer to include a quote, let alone a quote by Kid Cudi. Like others have said also improve your grammar and make it more specific to NYU. Basically you have a good foundation for a short answer, but need to improve it.</p>

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<p>It isn’t specific to NYU. Find something there that appeals to you personally</p>

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<p>i like the whole sound of it…but i agree with the above post…why nyu in new york…y not the one in abu dhabi, UAE…perhaps you should mention HOW u want ur life to change?</p>

<p>“during the night” can be simply written as “at night”</p>

<p>the idea is good…but u can and should make it better…
good luck!</p>