Is this a good common app essay?

College Essays
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<p>Would anybody mind reading my common app essay, just to let me know what you think?</p>

<p>thanks</p>

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<p>Can anybody give me comments about this essay?</p>

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<p>I wouldn’t mind reading it; I already submitted my common app.</p>

<p>Pm it to me=)</p>