Is This a Good Enough Essay Idea??

<p>So I have decided to go with a personal essay for the common App. My true passions are tennis and international business. I decided to write about developing a love for tennis. As a Hockey Player on the National team, I was on my way up. My team and i won the world championships in Quebec in 2004-2005. I got offers to go to outstanding preschools up north and out west. I will then talk about how i turned down the offers because I could not leave my family. (sick Mother to whom i am sooo close to). I couldnt continue that elite hockey level in florida. I always loved sports and there are puplic courts right next to my house so for practicality i chose tennis. My love for tennis grew and i became captain of varsity team and number 1 singles doubles. i wanted to give back to the game that had given me so much so i started a county program to teach underprivileged youth. Tennis also introduced me to a chinese boy (age 14) whom i met at a tournament. His family had just moved from china and he was out of school since he was 10 because his father thought he was a prodigy. I helped him to enroll in a high school and now i tutor him 5hrs per week. (I dont really know how to end it but that's the framework of the essay</p>

<p>I dont know if this idea is good enough for these kinds of schools or is it clique.</p>

<p>Gender: M
Race: Welsh, German, Chinese
Location: Florida, Top 10 high school in nation according US news and world report
(selective public) "Gifted"</p>

<p>GPA: 4.0 unweighted 4.8 weighted
Rank: School does not rank
SAT I: 2280 760-Math 740-CR 780-W
SAT II: US HIST-730 Math I-740 Going to definitely take more during Fall</p>

<p>Classes Taken:
All have been honors that are not AP- World History(4) Lang (4) US(5 ) Enivro (4)
Classes next year:
AP Physics C
AP Calc BC
AP Lit
AP Macroeconomics
AP Stat
Chinese II hon
Government hon</p>

<p>I expect recs and essays to be good</p>

<p>ECs/Awards-
Varsity Tennis (9,10,11,12)
Captain of Tennis team (11)
Played #1 Junior year and Won Districts and Regionals and #1 doubles (10,11)
Placed 4th and 5th respectively in state tennis championships
(won various local tennis tournaments that I wont bother mentioning here)
member of Tae kwon do Masters Club
First Degree Blackbelt
1st place in Regional Envirothon competition
National Honor Society Member (11,12)
Mu Alpha Theta Math Club member
<strong>I don't know if this is relevant but in 2004 i was Selected to the State select all star ice hockey team and won the world championships in Quebec</strong></p>

<p>Internship Stuff
* On and off internship from 8th-12th at Global Signal. Studying the business aspects
* summer of 2008 went to Saudi Arabia on internship and stayed at the dipolatic quarters
(US Embassy) with Michael Porter to Deliver Porter Prize and also worked on the Saudi Fast Growth 100 studying Saudi Women Entrepreneurs
-Working with Developer of new robotic hand to distribute to injured Mine workers.</p>

<p>Volunteering
Teach tennis for county Program
and tutor ESL students (mostly Chinese kids)</p>

<p>it’s not much what you write in these essays, it’s how you write it and how this reflects you.</p>

<p>it’s interesting. just make sure that it’s well organized since there were a lot of different topics that you seem to want to include
good luck =)</p>