<p>So, I just got my fin aid letter yesterday and so ****ed about the money they giving me. They giving me only $30000 when my efc is about $1603. I am a commute student. i decided to write an appeal letter. Here is a copy of my appeal letter. Can you guys proofread and give me some suggestion to make it better please???</p>
<p>"To whom it may concern,</p>
<p>I am a high school student who has been accepted at Boston College under the Regular Decision process. I am certainly honored to have been accepted by such a prestigious institution and by the college which I have fallen in love with. A couple of days ago, I received my Financial Aid package from BC and I am very grateful for the generous Financial Aid package that has been awarded to me by the Financial aid office. But I am afraid that after the financial aid package ($30,000), I would still have to pay about $10000 in order to attend BC and unfortunately there is no way that my parents will be able to pay that huge amount of money for my education.</p>
<p>My parents and I came to the US a year ago and my parents had to take a huge amount of loans from my relatives while coming to this country. Since they they are not highly educated, they do not have a high paid jobs and as a result their monthly income is very low. After paying monthly rent, electric bill,gas bill and miscellaneous expenses my parents will not be able to pay that huge amount of college expenses for my education especially when they are still trying to pay off their debts and I have a brother who is will be going to college very soon.</p>
<p>Therefore, if my final award remains the same as the tentative estimate award that BC offered, I will not be able to attend. I have already sent in an enrollment deposit but if I am not offered a better financial aid package from the school I will have to appeal my decision and go somewhere more affordable. I truly want to go to Boston College but without the financial means to do so I won’t be able to attend this coming Fall.</p>
<p>With all sincerity, I would like to request the financial aid committee to re-evaluate my financial aid package and make some adjustments so that I can afford my education. Without this enormous blessing I will be unable to attend school. Therefore, I ask for your utmost regard when it comes to reinstating my financial aid. Thank you for your time and consideration."</p>
<p>What you should really do is run this by your guidance counselor or another adult who is familiar with the process.</p>
<p>But from me I would mention your EFC, any other schools that have given you better aid, and offer to give any concrete evidence (tax forms, etc.) about your situation. Good luck!</p>
<p>Dear DHMan06 : Why are you sending a letter? On your financial aid page, you should have the name of the financial aid analyst at the college who is handling your file. Call the main switch board, get his/her phone number, and make a personal call. Make all of your same points over the phone and then follow up your appeal with a letter. I personally called my daughter’s analyst to review some material and the conversation was very congenial. Please remember that this is the toughest time of the year for these folks, so have your discussion points well organized.</p>
<p>One other point : why did you send a deposit, which is not due until May 1st, if you did not believe that the current financial package was sufficient? You had best start pursuing some other options that you have on the table in case BC will not be able to extend you further financial aid based on the Federal or Institutional calculations.</p>
<p>i felt a little threaten when reading it. haha. “Therefore, if my final award remains the same as the tentative estimate award that BC offered, I will not be able to attend”</p>
<p>It’s a nicely-worded letter, but adds no factual reason for BC to increase your grant. The issue is that most colleges (and perhaps BC?), will not be swayed by personal debt, i.e., debt due for car payments, credit cards or to other family members. That type of debt is excluded from Fafsa, and the IM calculations. </p>
<p>Good reasons to appeal finaid are excess medical expenses, a sibling in a private K-12 school, grandparent living with you, one-time bonus last year increased income, parent laid-off, and the like. Note, your efc will be cut in half when your brother goes to college – BC will up your aid at that time, but not before.</p>
<p>Good luck, but do not expect a positive response.</p>
<p>Let me get this straight: Boston College offered to pay $30,000 of the $40,000 price tag for you, and you’re COMPLAINING? Have you ever heard of gratefulness?</p>
fix that</p>