is this a good personal statement

<p>thanks i took your advice and tried it again
Many people believe being average is mediocre, therefore it is nothing to be proud of. Anyone can be average, and everyone can be normal. However, sometimes if we look closely enough average is something to be proud of. I come from a normal middle class suburban home. I am as average as it gets from the white picket fence around my house to the freezer with vanilla ice-cream. I have a mother and a father who provided me with this ordinary life, they never pushed me to be anything great. They truly believed mediocrity was okay, and I never understood why. Talking about my parents being immigrants from Taiwan is the typical story, as well as talking about their struggles. It is true when they first came to this country they had very little, and they both worked hard to buy a home and be a part of a middle class community. However, if I did not grow up from this average family I do not think I would have realized the importance or have the desire to go to a University.
I aspire to be more than average, because I grew up in average but my heart always wanted more. I knew that as long as I lived a stable life my family would be proud because that is more than what they had growing up. I wanted to achieve greatness, starting with gaining independence. I never lost sight of the family I came from however I learned not to be as co-dependent. I took trips from coast to coast to see different life styles and different mind sets. I learned that growing up in California in general gave me a more laid back sense than someone born in the heart of New York. Somewhere inside me I knew I had wished I had been part of that world. The experience I opened my eyes to a world where every person truly believed time was money. Living in California almost made me believe everywhere was easy going, with beaches and sunshine. However, going to the opposite coast made me realize everywhere in the world someone may have the same circumstances but their life is completely different. What we think is normal like sunshine, and beaches they think are different and rare. I learned there is so much more in this world than what we see on a daily basis.
Sometimes I would feel as though I wanted to be a thousand places at once. The only place in the entire world that could have that same feeling would be at a University. There are people from average families from different parts of the world. They bring their culture, and life style, they bring more. When all the different people in the world are placed together they make something extraordinary. Without having grown up in such an average family I would never have felt the desire to go out there, and see that there is more to life.</p>