Is this a good start for my essay?

[OMGMIT]

<p>Hi,
I am going to apply to colleges at November and I started writing my essay. I got the first 168 words ready, reply this thread if you want to read it and I will PM it to you.</p>

<p>Thanks.</p>

[InvisibleMonster]

<p>I’d be happy to look at it. :)</p>

[irishtraveler]

<p>I’d like to take a look at it as well. =)</p>

[CandidSquire]

<p>samesicles</p>

[iPacman]

<p>I’ll read it.</p>

[Magnesium]

<p>i’ll read whatever you have</p>

[MajorQuest]

<p>PM me…</p>

[Momilli101]

<p>i would love to read it</p>

[mannieee]

<p>me tooo!!! :)</p>

[dawoo1]

<p>happy to help</p>

[ShinyHelloKitty]

<p>I’ll read it :)</p>

[gadiii]

<p>i’ll read too</p>