Is this a legitimate essay topic?

Pre-College Issues High School Life
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<p>It may not be the perfect forum for this but I figured I would get more views here.</p>

<p>I'm writing about my grandpa and his journey to earn his college degree. He was one of the Japanese Americans interned during World War 2. In 1942, he was a freshmen at UCLA and was forced to go to an internment camp. I wrote about how his perseverance has inspired me in my academic and personal goals. I also wrote about how his experience reminds me that America, despite our rights and liberties, makes mistakes and we need to examine our policies to make sure we are protecting the rights/liberties the nation was founded on.</p>

<p>My family and my english teacher think it's good but I'm not sure if it answers the common app question. Is it too impersonal? Is it bad that I don't write a narrative about a personal experience i had and how it shaped me?</p>

<p>Thanks.</p>

<p>These are the schools I'm applying to:</p>

<p>Stanford
Cornell
Penn
RPI
CMU
Rice
Wash U
Michigan
Johns Hopkins</p>

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<p>bump :slight_smile: :slight_smile: :)</p>

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<p>I think its a reallly nice topic :-)</p>

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<p>remember to make the focus of you, not your grandpa. because they want to see why YOU should get in</p>

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<p>The only thing the essay topic could convey is your ability to express ideas. So the element of finding out about what kind of person you is somewhat lacking. See if you can make it personal by describing a specific experience in which your grandfather’s ambition inspired you. Focus on you and that experience rather than your grandfather. I think your thesis about policy in America might be too broad of a point for an essay that should be about you.</p>