So I want to write about my experience with my Chinese culture as I grew up. Sounds super stereotypical but wait! Here’s a summary of my essay topic:
So I was born here, but moved to China when 2 years old and moved back here when 6 years old. I ended up HATING being Chinese because of the environment I grew up in. I hated it so much I didn’t even want to be Chinese anymore and I desperately wished that I was white. But recently I moved and everyone was in awe of my culture and I returned back to my culture and completely embraced it and it’s a part of my identity now.
Thats the basic idea but if it’s not too generic, Ill add more details and embellish… Please help thank you!!
Ya I agree ^^. I’m sure there is a total value to talking about that aspect of your life, but make sure it goes back to what it says about you. From what you gave us, it doesn’t sound like it says a lot other than the fact that ur self-concious?
I’m not sure that “boring” is the adjective I would use. “Horrible” comes to my mind first. Nothing in your brief synopsis is a compelling reason to admit, IMO. I’d suggest trying again.
As an FYI. I edited all your histrionic shouting (but not you grammatical errors) as well; in the future, please don’t write in all-caps.
Theme is very stereotypical. But if your struggles with your cultural identity is what makes you special and potentially a valuable member of a college community, then go with it. Make sure you connect specific anecdotes with positive qualitative attributes. I think however you run a high risk of writing a pretty generic essay of trying too hard to be an atypical Asian.
The topic doesn’t have to be new or earth shattering. The essay needs to be compelling. A good writer can take a very common subject and make it fascinating. However, remember the purpose of this essay. It is not about winning a writing competition. Its about letting the college get to know you. Thats the whole point. Colleges want to know who you are and why they should want you. Pick a topic that will show you at your best. Let the colleges know not only what is special about you, but why they would want to have you on campus. Why would you make a good student, classmate, roommate. It may be that being chinese is a huge part of your identity, but that doesn’t explain why YOU would be a good addition to the campus. Imagine if you were in charge of putting a class together. What would make you want you?
@Publisher I dont know how you got" Clever thought, but I think that it would be better to submit her application essay in English." from my inquiry whether or not OP could read and write Chinese? I asked because many chinese american students cannot. It might make OP stand out and the essay could be more about bridging two cultures and discussing how being fluent in two so disparate languages is like belonging to two different worlds etc…
