<p>Right. Well....according to the post below, I shouldn't post my essay. So, if anyone wouldn't mind having a look at my essay, please reply here, PM me, IM me, or email me. Whatever. </p>
<p>Maybe I shouldn't do that either.</p>
<p>Well....hmm. I'll think about it...</p>
<p>Haven't had the chance to read it, but glanced over it. One tip: be careful about posting your essay, there are a lot of creepy goobers on the internet that might try to steal your essay! :]</p>
<p>Crap, I didn't think of that. Should I take it off?</p>
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In todays busy world, most people do not take time appreciate to the simple meal. Fewer
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<p>should be time to appreciate;</p>
<p>I have no idea what is good enough to get in to Yale, but I liked your essay :) The sustenance thing reminds me of Ferris Bueller hah.</p>
<p>That looks like more than 500 words.</p>
<p>Thanks. :)</p>
<p>I omit words a lot. I don't know why.</p>
<p>And yeah, it's about 600 words.</p>
<p>There're a lot of frequent CCers I'm sure you can trust (some of the parents, i.e., northstarmom, etc.) :] Major props for being done with an essay already, though. I haven't even started my app yet..</p>
<p>Your essay is good...its just a little...</p>
<p>I mean I'm sure Yale'll love it, it's got that kind of quirkiness you see in many modern examples of literature...it's just...</p>
<p>...well its not my thing.</p>
<p>But no worries, I'm going to write about how I'm a god (kidding...sort of...), so you're probably better off not listening to my advice.</p>
<p>Yeah, I know. I guess I shouldn't risk it though...it's my best essay. (I went to a college workshop and we had to write them.)</p>
<p>Gilla - You go right ahead and write about how you're God. My other essay is about my stint as leader of the USSR. Kind of the same thing!</p>
<p>Hey, Gorbachev, if you still need a reader, I'm up for it!</p>
<p>Thanks, I PM'd it.</p>
<p>Yup, Gorbachev, I'm interested in reading it too! And I agree with Rikataka...props for finishing it...I'm still trying to decide which prompt I like best :S</p>
<p>Hey I'll read it. I'm brutal at times but I mean well.</p>
<p>I'll read it too, since i got free time</p>
<p>Alright, I'm PM'ing it.</p>
<p>I thought the essay was effective. The only problem I had with it, though, was that the presence of humor came off as a tad bit forced. I'm not sure how to explain this but the punch line of the humor isn't strong enough. </p>
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In todays busy world, most people do not take time to appreciate the simple meal. Fewer still appreciate the wondrous versatility of Ramen.
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<p>You want to avoid this. Try making the first sentence more dramatic and the second sentence more lighthearted. That way there's a distinct punch line, get it?</p>
<p>Give me the essay! wait....hold on....ok give me one.</p>
<p>I'm up for reading it! Send it to me. I may be a little vague and mean though</p>
<p>Hmmm....noodles huh. I understand it and it was comical, but it didn't give me that "wow" feeling. I mean yeah you made some friends, but the noodle angle irks me a bit.</p>
<p>What about it?</p>