Is this essay up to snuff for Ivies?

<p>I'm not applying to all the Ivies, but several are among my top-choice schools. I'm not sure if I'm going to submit this essay as my Common App essay, and I'd love to know if I should submit it or not. Any advice or feedback would be great. If you are a current college student or recently-graduated college student who has been on the forum for a long time, please reply, and I'll email you my essay. Thank you in advance! :)</p>

<p>hey, PM me</p>

<p>I’ll be happy to read it over, but I won’t fix it for you. That’s your job.</p>

<p>PM me, i’ll give it a go</p>

<p>I’ll read yours pm please.</p>

<p>I can read it.</p>

<p>I’m a 2014er, only applying to 1 Ivy.</p>

<p>hi PM me, i’m only applying to columbia out of the ivies :)</p>

<p>Hey I’ll read your essay :slight_smile:
Just PM it to me</p>

<p>PM it to me too.</p>

<p>PM it to me. I’m applying to two Ivies, but my applications are all in - I can’t change them! So don’t worry, I won’t steal anything.</p>

<p>I’d be willing to read since I already finished and submitted my apps.</p>