Is this good start to an essay?

College Essays
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<p>Anyone want to comment on the topic and beginning to my essay? I understand I need to fix the language and syntax, but I just want feedback on the general idea of this essay, and if this is a good topic? Any tips?</p>

<p>I'll message you my essay</p>

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<p>Feel free to message it to me, I will take a look.</p>

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<p>feel free to message it to me :)</p>

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<p>i edited it a bit, anyone want to look at it?</p>

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<p>bump 10 char</p>

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<p>Bumpity bump</p>

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<p>Anyone please?</p>

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<p>Feel free to message it to me</p>

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<p>Message me and I’ll read it!</p>

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<p>Thanks guys!</p>