<p>This is the sentence: I was so confused when all of a sudden a light bulb went off over my head.</p>
<p>Is that ok to write on an essay because it is a metaphor?</p>
<p>well it’s a bit cliche of a phrase. if your essay was very carefree and humorous in tone and context it could work, but if you were writing a very serious and emotional piece, IMO it would seem kind of silly/throw your essay off.
I recommend straying away from cliches or overused phrases anyway-I’m sure you can come up with something much more interesting and personal to convey the same meaning:)
And also, metaphors are definitely fine to use, that isn’t the problem here.</p>
<p>Ok thanks for your feedback</p>
<p>I’ll disagree with Jmoney22 because of this essay</p>
<p>[Autobiography</a> for Columbia University](<a href=“http://www.humanityiloveyou.com/2010/11/16/columbia-university/]Autobiography”>http://www.humanityiloveyou.com/2010/11/16/columbia-university/)</p>
<p>a must…read</p>
<p>But your sentence is way too cliche and kind of boring. You better have one damn funny essay and makes you laugh so hard it hurts. In a good way that will get you accepted but appear you’re a solid yet serious student.</p>
<p>This is my new sentence now: I pondered upon this for a while when a light bulb went off in my head, and I finally came to an understanding that the noises made the house livelier.</p>
<p>Let me know if this works now. I know it’s not funny.</p>
<p>that essay is very good, but i can imagine that it’s harder to pull off for most.
anyway, it’s really all up to you- if it’s your personal voice, then you should use it.
also, OP, your sentence is a bit awkward. how about; “A light bulb went off inside my head after pondering upon this for a while; it came to my understanding that the noises made the house livelier.”</p>
<p>@Jmoney22 the sentence sounds and seems better. Thanks for your suggestion</p>
<p>Wow, that essay is way more than 500 words. How did he fit all of that?</p>