Is this too weird? and impersonal?

College Essays
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<p>I can't really tell...</p>

<p>Can u help me? Read my essay and tell me what u think! =)</p>

2

<p>I’ll read yours if you will read mine also :D</p>

<p>Pm me</p>

3

<p>I’ll give it a read :)</p>

4

<p>Send it and I can give it a quick read - but don’t count on me for grammar :P</p>