<p>So, in no detail at all, here is my outline of the outline to my essay. It is supposed to "Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you."</p>
<p>-I open talking about how duck hunting seems like an insane sport because you can work really hard it won't necessarily put ducks in the bag
-I then talk about how I had a certain, single hunt that was my last chance to hunt for a long time, and I hit a deer driving out.
-It seems like fate is out to get me, so I'm initially discouraged
-I realize (while I'm at home, not hunting) that failure is inevitable, and sometimes out of our control. </p>
<p>I don't feel like I spend enough time on my experience here, like it may seem minor, it only takes up one paragraph, then a lot on the obvious life lessons learned. What do you guys think?</p>
<p>I think that more details on the experience could make for an interesting essay. Make it personal, detailed, honest, revealing.</p>
<p>Imo, dispense with telling the life lessons. Whatever you've shown with details won't need to be retold, and whatever you haven't shown with details won't be persuasive when told.</p>
<p>I don't feel a lot of personal change from reading your outline, but that's okay if your point is that the event (hitting a deer?) didn't change or impact you.</p>
<p>Also, I wouldn't pick "failure is inevidable and out of our control" as the theme of a college entrance essay. But maybe you mean something positive by that?</p>
<p>I think they're looking for an event that was powerful enough to change your outlook on life or something.. and I'm not seeing the duck story as powerful enough.</p>
<p>Were your feelings or beliefs about fate altered in some way?</p>
<p>Well I have read your posts, I am confident I have accounted for all the things you guys mentioned and more , and I think my essay is better as a result. Because I am sending this in tonight, I will not require any more help. I thank you for your support. Wish me luck.</p>