Just finished my first UC essay: Help me revise it, please?

College Essays
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<p>Thank you in advance for any help. UCLA is pretty much my top choice so I'm really looking to make these essays count. Just post and I'll PM it right over.</p>

<p>I'd gladly read any essays of yours too, UC or not so you can PM yours as well. If not, that's great too.</p>

<p>In any case, best of luck to all of you in the admissions process. :)</p>

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<p>hey! sure, why not. PM it over.
I’ll offer a word of advise, or two.</p>

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<p>ill read it</p>

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<p>I can help</p>

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<p>I’m doing the same essays so PM it over…I’ll help</p>

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<p>PM me and I’ll read it.</p>

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<p>Thanks for all the replies-sent out to all of you :)</p>

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<p>hi,
I can take a look :)</p>

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<p>i could read it as well</p>

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<p>hey i can take a look…i’m an english teacher…perhaps you would like to look at my son’s?</p>

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<p>over here ! ! !</p>

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<p>PM me here</p>

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<p>pm me:)
i can take a look at it:)</p>

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<p>Hi! I can take a look at it and offer you my opinion! PM it!</p>

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<p>i’m writing mine right now too and i’d be happy to look over yours. my eyes need a break from my essay.</p>

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<p>sure pm it</p>