Just finished two versions of a short essay... which one's better?

Applying to College
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<p>I'll pm it to you.</p>

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<p>i</a> can help</p>

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<p>anyone else?</p>

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<p>if I didn't read it yet, send it over.</p>

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<p>pm me......</p>

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<p>It looks like you've got plenty of readers, but I just wanted to tell you that your user name is amazing.</p>

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<p>I can read it</p>

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<p>Hey Traf - your inbox is full but I'll take a look at your essays!</p>

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<p>i can help</p>