last minute revising!!!

Applying to College
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<p>NYU ED apps are due tomorrow and I need someone to help with last minute revising please</p>

<p>In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line.</p>

<p>It is the year 2050 and the much-anticipated film, “Breaking Inhibition”, will finally be making its debut. Centered on the life of renowned dermatologist xxxxx xxx, the film will unveil the struggles xxx faced as a child sharing a tumultuous relationship with her mother. The movie follows xxx as she transcends trying to gain approval from her mom, and starts living the life she wants to live, leading her to find a cure to eradicate acne forever.</p>

<p>If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone - past or present, fictional or non-fictional - who is generally associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York City.)
As the self-proclaimed lover to New York City, Carrie Bradshaw, from the New York City based television show Sex and the City, would give me a perceptive tour of the great city. By avoiding the tourist-infested spots, I would gain insight into the soul of the city, rather than experiencing the city from a superficial view. We would start off with breakfast at a snug coffee shop, where she would tell me how it felt to live in the heart of the city whilst doing what she loves. We would also indulge in girl talk, sharing stories of past boyfriends. The rest of the day would be spent on her helping me get familiar with the city. By day’s end, I would know which street vendors sold the best hot dogs and using the subway would no longer seem like an enigmatic mess.</p>

<p>Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.
After watching my best friend struggle with the plight of severe acne for the past four years, I developed a passion to become a dermatologist. Skin problems are an issue familiar to many people, but it is not considered a serious enough medical problem as to receive much attention. My goal is to one day find a non-addictive treatment that can be used by all people to, if not completely clear acne, at least ameliorate the embarrassment and destruction of self-esteem it causes.</p>

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<p>you just have to pick one of them right?</p>

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<p>actually these were my personal statements, which there are five of and we only need to write about a paragraph each. please help with any grammar errors!</p>

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<p>is anybody willing to help…?</p>

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<p>OK, here’s my advice.</p>

<h1>1 and #3 are too much alike. I would suggest you take the storyline from #3 and use it in place of the mother-issue storyline of #1. Then for #3, be a bit more specific about what NYU specifically can offer you.</h1>

<h1>2 is, IMO a bit too vague and general. I’m not a Sex in the City watcher, but what exactly is it about Carrie Bradshaw’s New York that appeals to you?</h1>

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<p>thank youuu</p>