letter to supervisor to transfer

Pre-College Issues High School Life
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<p>im thinking about transferring schools but i have to write a letter to the field office supervisor saying why i want to transfer i have to have a very good reason and be convincing in order for them to let me transfer. So heres my letter. Can u guys look at it and see if its ok.</p>

<p>Dear field office supervisor,
I would like to transfer schools from __ hs to__ hs. I am new to___ hs this year and im not adjusting well. I feel that if i go back to my old school, than i will do better acadamically and socially. I will also be happier and more confident which will result in my grades improving wheres as at my new school, im sad and depressed which will cause my grades to drop. When i went to __ hs i felt at place for the first time. Its really hard to start over at a new school. Furthermore, i do not feel comftrable in the environment at my new school and its difficult for me to adapt. Also i was familar with the type of work and the teachers expectationas at my old school. However, at __ hs, the work is different. In addition, im interested in joining leos club at my old school and the club does not exist at __ hs. It would be my best interest in switching schools and i hope u feel the same way. If you care about the well being of students then you will allow me to transfer. Thank you for your time and consideration.</p>

<p>How does this sound??</p>

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<p>anyone...come on guys!!</p>

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<p>Even though it sounds intimitading (your letter, in conclusion), my response is: I would not send a letter where I haven't capitalized every "i" in usage of describing myself. That's how it's done in English.</p>

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<p>Why does this sound way too desperate? And it sounds like it was written by a non-native English speaker</p>

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<p>I did capitalize the "i" in my letter, I just didn't feel like capitalizing it on here. And ill take the last part out ur rite it is intimidating. Does it really sound to desperate though? What else should i take out or revise?</p>

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<p>Why are you in the new HS in the first place? that should be addressed</p>

<p>I would want to know why you switched in the first place, because that would be relevent to your wanting to go back</p>

<p>if someone did you a big favor initially switching schools, and it was a special case, they may say, too bad</p>

<p>and your reasons, wel, you sound whiney</p>

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<p>i came to a new school because i moved, ill add that to the letter. I didnt mean to be whiny, i was just trying to be honest. I guess i should take out some the emotional stuff if it sounds that bad</p>

<p>Any more suggestions on what i can change or put?</p>

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<p>anyone????</p>