<p>Looking for someone willing to read my essay and critique. I really really need help revealing my message in my essay (my conclusion particularly).</p>
<p>Other things...</p>
<p>-grammer
-transitions
-word choice</p>
<p>Anyone out there?</p>
<p>12 views and no one out there willing?</p>
<p>yeah i'm willing to read it.</p>