Looking for Essay Readers! (Draft)

<p>So I'm currently in the process of butchering and re-writing my common app essay but I keep getting stuck. Please post/PM if you're willing to proofread what I have :]</p>

<p>Only got 2 people to read it, still looking~
For the record, applying to Cornell, Dartmouth, Columbia, Carnegie Mellon, BU, Northeastern, Rutgers Pharm. D., Drexel, and Lehigh.</p>