Looking for some harsh criticism for these essays!

College Essays
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<p>Two short MIT ED essays. Can someone, who's not applying to MIT, help me make these stronger?
Thank you!!</p>

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<p>I’m not applying to MIT - I’ll edit your two if you’ll take a look at my Georgetown EA one!</p>

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<p>They are legitimately terrible – and I didn’t even have to read them ;)</p>

<p>Sure, you can send them to me – MIT’s definitely not on my list</p>

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<p>Hahaa, Sirensong, thanks. I sent it.
And kcmdonahue, I really appreciate your offer, but I feel awful since I really don’t have time to edit yours. Thanks anyway though!</p>

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<p>oh don’t worry about it Pynne, i’ll look anyways - I don’t mind! PM me</p>

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<p>I am not doing anything now lol, so I will be glad to read it.And give an opinion. Pm me.</p>

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<p>Hello, I can take a look for you, but expect some criticism.</p>

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<p>can someone also read my why Swarthmore essay??? STAT, the deadline is coming up…PM me, thanks</p>