Looking for someone to critique my Common App essay

<p>The early action deadline is coming up, and I'm still a little nervous about my essay. Would someone here mind reading my essay over and giving a little bit of advise/criticism?</p>

<p>Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>i’ll take a look if you want-- email it to me as an attachment: <a href="mailto:missmibster@yahoo.com">missmibster@yahoo.com</a></p>

<p>sure, can pm it to me
but help me look at mine, too, ok?
i’m rushing for ED too</p>