Looking for someone to read my transfer essay.

Transfer Students
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<p>I am a student at Saint Louis University, looking to transfer to University of Chicago, Washington University, Northwestern, or Vanderbilt. I am looking for someone to read my college essay.</p>

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<p>I can read, I got into Cornell U. as a transfer last year :)</p>

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<p>I’ll read it for you.</p>

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<p>What’s you-all’s email? I would post it here but I don’t want someone else to steal my work.</p>

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<p>Just send me a private message. Click my username and then msg me.</p>

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<p>Send it via email by clicking my name not private message, sorry.</p>

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<p>I have sent it to you.</p>

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<p>It is a very good essay man. Is this your common application essay or an extra essay that you wrote for Washington University in St. Louis?</p>

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<p>Hey, thanks, “Matisyahu”. It’s my common application essay for Wash-U. Do you think I need to improve anything?.. I don’t think there are any extra essays.</p>

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<p>Well I just an extra specific one since my Common Application one was generic (applying to couple of different schools).</p>

<p>It a very strong essay with good personal stories. I think maybe if you talk a little bit more about the school - courses, teachers, programs, it could be to your advantage</p>

<p>I’m not sure if you got my email but you repeated the “It was senior of high school” bit.</p>

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<p>If you want another opinion PM me with it</p>

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<p>Thanks, “Matisyahu”. Oh, well that sounds like a lot of essays; I hope you get into all of your schools. Is University of Chicago one of them? I actually don’t know what you mean when you say that I repeated the “It was senior year of high school” bit. I couldn’t find that phrase in my paper. Thank you for reading my paper!</p>

<p>“Baller 11,” I have just sent you my paper.</p>

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<p>Oh my bad that was a different essay.
Yours is bio research right? Yeah your essay is spectacular. Very detailed and specific.
I wanted to apply to Chicago - but then I realized everyone applying were extremely overqualified. </p>

<p>I think your essay was excellent - maybe if you talk a little more about Washington University in St. Louis - in terms of courses/teachers/diversity it may be good.</p>

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<p>Thanks, Matisyahu! </p>

<p>Isn’t everyone already “overqualified” to the schools to which you are applying? I think you’ll be fine. </p>

<p>I’ll try to talk more about diversity and academics in my essay. Thanks again, Matisyahu!</p>