Lost confidence after deferral-- want to read/critique?

<p>I was pretty happy with my personal essay, but after getting deferred from my ED school (Brown), I'm worried it's not good enough.</p>

<p>It's about how the soccer World Cup made me realize that there is more to life than math and science :D</p>

<p>Anyone care to look it over and give comments?</p>

<p>I’ll take a look at it.</p>