Mark my sat essay

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<p>If u mark my sat essay i will love you for life.
Im from england and over here no one even knows what the sat is let along know how to grade it.</p>

<p>Thanks again I owe you!
the question was: ''do people succeed more when allowed to do things their own way?''</p>

<p>People succeed when they can do things in their on way. The example of Lech Walesa can be seen as success achieved in an unconventional way: although he had no education in politics, Walesa succeeded as a politician as he was relatable. Harry Potter, the protagonist of J.K Rowling's 1992 children's novel, also succeeded in his endeavours by doing things in his own way, though in his case this meant breaking school rules. Another example that shows great accomplishment achieved in an unconventional manner is that of Joseph Lister, who founded antiseptic surgery by carrying out an ''unprofessional'' experiment.</p>

<p>Lech Walesa, the 1982 Nobel peace-prize winner, is also one of the best examples of success achieved in an unexpected way. Walesa was a fired shipyard worker from Gdansk, with no formal education in law- or any other discipline for that matter. However this made him more relatable to the public, helping him pursued people to join him in the 1980 strike against Polish communistic leaders. Going after his goal in his own way allowed Walesa to eradicate communism entirely from Poland by August 1989.</p>

<p>Unlike Walesa who succeeded by convincing the public to support his solidarity party, Harry Potter succeeded by breaking school rules. After the lives of his Mudblood friends were endangered by the opening of the Chamber of Secrets at Hogwarts, Harry decided that the only way to solve the problem was by breaking school rules. Although risking him severe punishment, sneaking to the forbidden section of the library and entering the forbidden forest enlightened Harry as to how to close the chamber. By doing things in his own way Potter managed to save his friends' lives and make Hogwarts a safe place for all once again.</p>

<p>The example of Joseph Lister, the British surgeon of the 1890s, also shows how success can be achieved in a surprising way. Rather than abiding to the norm of conduction experiments in a laboratory, Lister studied his hypothesis on an eleven-year old boy. After covering the youngster's wound with carbolic acid- a mixture of phenol and ethanol- the boy's wound healed... with no need of amputation! This was a breakthrough in medical history. By abiding only to his own rules, Lister became the father of antiseptic surgery, saving much suffering and countless lives.</p>

<p>We are taught to obey the rules. Doing things in an unconventional manner is feared to be troublesome. However as the examples of Lech Walesa, Harry Potter and antisceptic surgery show, success can be achieved in unexpected ways. As examples of politics, literature and medicine show, challenging the norm can become the catalyst to success- but only if people are not afraid of it.</p>

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<p>Decent essay, about a 9. Not bad for a newbie to the SAT!</p>

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<p>Hey thanks
your good- I got an 8</p>

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<p>definitely the 8-10 range.</p>

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<p>I don’t like the introduction–you’ve jumped too far ahead of your readers. Turn the conclusion’s first couple of sentences into the introduction. That sets up your premise and how you are interpreting the question.</p>

<p>It’s Ok in terms of organization, though I found a lot of the writing very clumsy. Are you a native English speaker? At least in American English, you don’t say somebody is “relatable.” Also, I don’t know what the “norms of conduction experiments” were for Lisker so that point is a little lost on me, but are you really arguing that it’s OK to do medical experimentation on humans because you have a hypothesis you want to try? </p>

<p>Finally, I could quibble with your argument. The question asks about whether people do better when they are allowed to be different. Your argument is that people succeed when they do what is not allowed.</p>