Maybe not risky, but at least it's unconventional!

[cameliasinensis]

<p>Would anyone care too look over my Common App essay? I'm worried that it's a bit unclear and that some of the paragraphs don't work very well together. Any feedback would be appreciated.</p>

<p>Preview:

@me - no plagiarizing!

In Foreign Ministry parlance they call it "going native". It’s what happens when a statesman commits the ultimate indiscretion: letting his eyes linger a moment longer than appropriate on the seductive outline of a foreign shore, inhaling unfamiliar scents like an exotic perfume, and without exactly realizing it, agreeing to spend the night—only in this case it might be a decade or a lifetime.

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<p>Intrigued yet? :p</p>

[RandomStudent]

<p>Sounds interesting. PM me....</p>

[cameliasinensis]

<p>Thanks! Anyone else?</p>

[momojojo]

<p>i'll read it. nice metaphor.</p>

[sabregiel121]

<p>oo, taht sounds interesting. pm me please! im actually a prep school applicant but the process is pretty much identical to college, plus alot of the prompts sound teh same too.</p>

[ati]

<p>It sound interesting. PM me.</p>

[cwatson]

<p>interested in where this goes, PM it</p>

[blairt]

<p>i'll read it</p>