<p>Read my two essays? About to turn in my application for UMich.</p>
<p>Yeah I’ll read both of yours if you read over one of my Michigan essays.</p>
<p>bump</p>
<p>Anyone actually want to read it and not steal my content?</p>
<p>Actually, believe it or not, I have more important things to do in my life than to sit on CC all day. But to get back to the main point about reading your essays, and I’m going to be blunt. 1. You described your content well but you really didn’t say how you fit into that community except for that one paragraph. 2. The first few paragraphs are fine and dandy and introduce you well, but it doesn’t answer the question at all. After that, what you have is fine (I like the last three paragraphs), yet your verbage seems too relaxed and comfortable. ex: “You may think that undecided means that I have no clue what I want to do with my life” Things like that and ‘zillion’, etc, come off as unprofessional to me.</p>
<p>BTW I already have my own essays written and they are a completely different school within Mich and different focus.</p>
<p>If I was specifically referring to you I’d have let you known beforehand because I don’t blindly accuse people of things (I’ve already talked to that person)…</p>
<p>But thanks for the critique, I appreciate it.</p>