MIT Essay review

<p>I already posted to the MIT forum but someone suggested to try here too. Anyone want to read another essay? I've been rewriting and rewriting it but I'm still not sure if it is that good. I'm applying EA so its due tomorrow. I'm doing 4b, "Describe the world you come from, for example your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?" If anyone could get to it tonight I'd really appreciate it.</p>

<p>PM it to me before 9 PST and I'll read it.</p>