<p>um i just got done w/ the first draft and need someone to honestly tell me if it sucks, which i'm thinking it does more and more... also it might be too casual for MIT... </p>
<p>preferably no '08ers lol</p>
<p>buuuuuuuuump</p>
<p>im '08 but applying for penn and my app is done… i can help you… if you dont want it thats cool too</p>
<p>pm it over. I will help, if you like my comments on others.</p>
<p>I can help too</p>
<p>hey, I’m definitely not applying to MIT (you can check my past posts and everything to check) so I would love to help you.
PM it over</p>
<p>Hi, you have very impressive descriptions of the localities, and I believe you are a good writer. However, you should write about how your city, the community or your school has shaped you into what you are. The prompt, though I did not read it, must be something like how a certain place influences you in a significant way. You cannot write sequentially, or topdown way, without saying that you have learnt a lot from your community and how you pay back.</p>