<p>Hey everyone.. i have one essay that i'm using for the 'describe yourself in your own words' prompt. i ended up writing a piece in which i try to subtly display my character traits. some people i submitted it to for peer revision said it was great, but others (including my english teacher) said it didn't have a point, lacking a thesis. also, i'm hearing that my last paragraph is not related to the rest of my essay. i'd really appreciate it if i could get some input from you guys, as i'm trying to send in my app tomorrow morning. thanks a lot.</p>
<p>Sure, PM it to me</p>
<p>id be happy to read it</p>
<p>pm me if you want.</p>
<p>I can try to help. PM.</p>
<p>I'll read it too.</p>
<p>sure, i'll read it</p>
<p>i</a> can help</p>