Mixed VIEWS on my ESSAY?

<p>Ok, so i have given a lot of people my essay to read. Some say they loved it, others say its the "sterotypical essay". To me, it seems as if the ones that say they loved it understand my twist to the typical sports essay. While the sterotypical people just view it as a sports essay...</p>

<p>Basically, i have a very nice intro (a lot of people said this), then its about how i used this ideology throught life (the AMERICAN DREAM), especially for my sport. But then the next sentence sets the stage for the whole essay, its says that nothing has changed in the our community in the past 25 years (we have never won).</p>

<p>Thereafter, we come along (my team and i) to only try and prove this "curse" wrong... YET we dont achieve it. But rather we walk away with the respect of maturity.</p>

<p>THIS IS THE BASIS OF THE ESSAY... We learn from the American Underdog and his AMERICAN DREAM!!!</p>

<p>THen theres a little last sentence that says I forgot to mention, i still have another chance to win as in theres still senior year...</p>

<p>I HOPE ITS NOT TOO CLICHE? BUT I PROMISE YOU IF YOU WANT TO READ IT THAT IT DOES NOT AT ALL SOUND LIKE THE TYPICAL ESSAY!!!</p>

<p>THANKS!</p>

<p>sorry.. its read my essay lol</p>