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<p>I am a international student applying for UC, Berkeley and UCSD as a transfer student. One of their essay questions in its application form is </p>

<p>Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud, and how does it relate to the person you are? </p>

<p>I am considering to write three experiences. one is the two years preparing for National biology competition of senior high students, the regorous and scientific attitude I got. 2nd is the experience in school dancing team, and proved to my peers that I can balance between study and dancing. 3rd is one of the student representative of studies in class, being a great helper to both teachers and students. I want to say I am well rounded.</p>

<p>Is it a good idea? or, should I focus one one experience?</p>

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<p>Hey.
Your experiences sound great and interesting.
But all three of them do not correlate with one another.
You essay has to flow with each topic.
I understand that your a well rounded person, but try to use that into only one experience.
Also the prompt states only ONE quality, accomplishment, or contribution or experience.
You just want to give reader only a taste of who you are.
You don’t want to write a whole story about yourself.
So just write about one.
The dancing experience is pretty interesting, I think; but try to avoid that there’s balance of studying and dancing. Not to be rude, but it’s pretty obvious that students have a balance life btw studies and hobbies.
Be creative.
The other experiences are a bit cliche in my opinion.</p>

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<p>I recommend that you pick one that you can explain really well and use it for that essay</p>