<p>No offense, but I wouldn't give your essay more than an 8, if that, Zfox001. It is riddled with misspellings, incorrect idioms, poorly-worded sentences, etc.; additionally, there is a marked deficiency in overall coherency and cohesiveness. The OP's essay demonstrates a firm grasp of the English language; yours does not.</p>
<p>instead of bickering (haha lol this thread is hilarious) can someone put up more 12 essay exmples? i got a 9 the first time i took the sat, and im hoping i can hit 11 this time (is it possible?) lol</p>
<p>^ Coffeeicecream, I have an 11 essay I can post, if you want. Or just PM it to you. Lemme know if you're interested.</p>
<p>Mr. Prez, I completly agree. My first essay was an 8, my second was an 11. When I went back and read the first essay later, it was bad. As in, really bad. I don't know how I managed an eight...</p>
<p>OP- You posted your essay, don't expect us all to think it's the greatest thing since mechanical pencils.</p>
<p>Haha. Normally, ignorance such as yours is excusable, but I provided not only a link to the wiki page explaining it (did you neglect to read it?) but also substantiated my position within the body of my post. Looking at your response to the other poster, all you seem to be able to provide are baseless accusations and petty insults (while at wiki, look up "ad hom"; your argument might benefit from reading there as well) - I would suggest that before you attempt to share your judgment on a subject you 1) research it and 2) explain the reasoning behind your position while you are actually typing out your ¢2.</p>
<p>Furthermore, regarding your actual essay, it might help to look at the rubric by which the graders (supposedly) go off of:</p>
<p>How</a> the Essay is Scored</p>
<p>Take note of the nebulous wording of their requirements, and then attempt to see why some might see your essay as merely "competent" and not "insightful", or "focused" as opposed to "clearly focused." Maybe it was your complete lack of variety in syntax (come on; only periods? Use different punctuation at least) that failed the "demonstrates meaningful variety in sentence structure" quota (as opposed to the unmodified "variety" or "some variety")...</p>
<p>It would also be interesting to see why exactly you imagined your essay to be worthy of a 12, when neither of your two graders thought so. Surely, some errant, biased scorer might have malevolently or stupidly given you a low score which you purportedly do not deserve; both of them, however, gave you a "less than perfect" mark -- had there been too great a discrepancy in your individual scores, CB would have taken note and acted accordingly. Please specify why your work is ever so great, instead of simply proclaiming it to be so.</p>
<p>My composite score was 2320. What was yours? :) My "superscore" if you count my last test, which had a 12 essay score is 2380.</p>
<p>And you again used the phrase "big words". There were no "big words" as far as I can tell. If you think there were, then that says something not so good about you.</p>
<p>My argument never was, "AMERICANS ARE THE MOST INDIVIDUALISTIC PEOPLE BECAUSE THEY INVENTED THE MOST THINGS IN THE LAST 200 YEARS". If you can't distinguish between cause and effect, then that again says something not so good about you.</p>
<p>Me: calming picking you apart.
You: calling me names.</p>
<p>Winner: Me. Go cry in the corner, cupcake. Let me know when you're done; I would rather enjoy toying with you for as long as you'd be willing to subject yourself.</p>
<p>Someone needs to grow up and face reality. Why would you post your essay if you're not willing to accept criticism?</p>
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<p>It would also be interesting to see why exactly you imagined your essay to be worthy of a 12, when neither of your two graders thought so. Surely, some errant, biased scorer might have malevolently or stupidly given you a low score which you purportedly do not deserve; both of them, however, gave you a "less than perfect" mark -- had there been too great a discrepancy in your individual scores, CB would have taken note and acted accordingly. Please specify why your work is ever so great, instead of simply proclaiming it to be so.
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<p>Yes.</p>
<p>really begoner....
okay so first off...by saying no offense you realize that your statement is kinda offensive. there would have been much better ways to phrase what you said. lets just say this. Riddled with bad idioms, misspelling, and poorly worded sentences? if that was truely so i wouldn't have gotten a 12. The people who grade things things aren't idiots and they can see if an essay is TRULY RIDDLED with them. There might be something here of there but it isn't filled with them. Im sorry i spelled regard "regaurd" a couple times. My bad. I don't have a grasp of the english language? wow...um...not sure what to say to that. except that I was able to write a coherent essay that actually proved something. they are looking for people who can analyze/develope a point not be the most eloquent writer since shakespeare.
im not upset that you said my essay was no more than an 8. It was your description for why. My argument was btw coherent and it made sense.
And just to point this out...the OP's essay lacked analysis and that is probably why it received a 9. I wouldn't call that essay any more of a firm grasp of the english language than mine. And also just kinda thowing this out there....his was typed...he could have fixed all the little spelling and minor mistake in his. You read exactly what i wrote in 25 minutes one morning at 8.</p>
<p>Oh yeah post your essay that got a 12. I would love to read that.</p>
<p>Oh okay someone already posted a perfect advice for you. I will quote it for emphasis:</p>
<p>It would also be interesting to see why exactly you imagined your essay to be worthy of a 12, when neither of your two graders thought so. Surely, some errant, biased scorer might have malevolently or stupidly given you a low score which you purportedly do not deserve; both of them, however, gave you a "less than perfect" mark -- had there been too great a discrepancy in your individual scores, CB would have taken note and acted accordingly. Please specify why your work is ever so great, instead of simply proclaiming it to be so.</p>
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<p>How could he have gotten a 12 on the last test when the last test was in June and this essay prompt was from June? </p>
<p>And CLEARLY, only SAT scores measure intelligence. Nothing else is even considered.</p>
<p>Moral of the thread: DON'T POST YOUR ESSAY UNLESS YOU ARE WILLING TO ACCEPT CRITICISM.</p>
<p>Mood: I never said I deserved a 12, so please read my posts. I said that after taking the test, I expected an "11 or 12", but after going over it would not have been surprised by a 10. So that's settled now. Thank you.</p>
<p>About fallacies: I had no need to click your silly link, because I'm well acquainted with the fallacy. And I did not commit it. If I had said something like "I think Americans are original because of X and only X" and X was clearly insufficient to establish the claim, then yes, you'd be right. As it stands I said nothing of the sort. You are incorrect. Please don't think that you can argue for a point merely by posting a link. That's just lazy.</p>
<p>Moreover, you are incorrect about me committing "ad hom" as you like to call it. Ad hominem is committed when someone implies that an argument is incorrect simply because of some personal quality of the person making the argument. I've done no such thing.</p>
<p>So for the third time, please stop throwing around terms that you're not familiar with.</p>
<p>Ok I really am done now boys. Adios!</p>
<p>entrance: my last test before the test under discussion. Please stop grasping at straws.</p>
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Oh yeah post your essay that got a 12. I would love to read that.
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<p>^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^</p>
<p>Post your 12 essay Targus</p>
<p>you should post the scanned version....then we know it is really the essay you wrote in the 25 minutes
i would like to read it too</p>
<p>come on Targus we are all waiting</p>
<p>And yet again you have failed to substantiate!</p>
<p>Regarding your fallacies... Let's look only at the current page!</p>
<p>Ad Hom:</p>
<p>if you think my diction was overly "fancy", or that the words I chose were "big", then perhaps you're just not very bright?</p>
<p>--------Where exactly do you address his accusation of your being overly verbose? I certainly see you insulting the poster's intelligence, but never actually answer his qualm. Nowhere else do you elaborate.</p>
<p>Winner: Me. Go cry in the corner, cupcake.</p>
<p>---------Again with the insults! You also seem to labor under the delusion that you're "calming picking [others] apart" when, in fact, you are doing no such thing. </p>
<p>And then you insult the sanctity of a wiki link! How dare you?! It shows, by the way, that you never bothered to read it! You provided two relatively weak anecdotes (isolated occurrences), both of which were insufficient to reach the conclusion that "It is better for a society when people act as individuals rather than copying the ideas and opinions of others." Instead of slinging insults, you should have recognized that a sourceless and statistic-less 25 minutes is insufficient to establish correlation, much less the causation that the prompt beseeches.</p>
<p>""I think Americans are original because of X and only X" and X was clearly insufficient to establish the claim, then yes, you'd be right. As it stands I said nothing of the sort. You are incorrect."</p>
<p>I'm not addressing America, I'm addressing the prompt, and how you failed to properly evidence it. Furthermore, simply stating that "I am incorrect" does nothing --- the onus is on you, not one me, to demonstrate the validity of your claim.</p>
<p>butternut can you please PM me! thanks a bunch! maybe i should start a thread, huh? hmm...</p>
<p>Zfox001, by saying "no offense" I was attempting to imply that my criticism of your essay should not be construed in a negative light or taken in a personal manner. I could detail each error in your essay, but that's irrelevant. It is evident, however, that your writing was entirely absent of even the barest pretense of eloquence; moreover, the various grammatical (and spelling-related) lapses throughout your essay suggest that you lack a familiarity with certain nuances of the English language. Congratulations of obtaining a 12, though -- I don't mean to detract from that. Nor is my intent to impugn your writing ability; I'm simply stating that in the brief 25-minute window you have to demonstrate your writing skill on the SAT, you displayed an understanding of the English language that was slightly above average.</p>
<p>On the other hand, despite his greater familiarity with the English language, the OP failed to adequately substantiate his points in a sufficiently logical and thorough manner. While I don't believe that poorly-written, turgid prose should be valued above well-phrased, concise writing that is somewhat lacking in support, the graders obviously don't share my views. Obviously, though, the OP has significant issues with his ego and is unable to acknowledge the shortcomings of his essay (even a possibly doctored version).</p>
<p>targus cl is a troll. can't accept the fact that he cant get a 12 on a essay. you lose. good game.</p>
<p>Just ace the multiple choice and you won't have to worry about writing a 12 essay.</p>