My Admission Essay

I am applying for an Architecture major in GAtech and for the short question; “Beyond rankings, location, and athletics, why are you interested in attending Georgia Tech?”
i have written,
“Although famous for its engineering programs, I consider Georgia Tech as a school that offers an interdisciplinary education for every major it offers. After thorough research, I couldn’t imagine myself going to other schools or even think of other schools to apply because of the academics, courses and all the activities Georgia tech offers. Moreover, practices used by Georgia Tech such as the Problem-Based Learning and Flipped Classroom may benefit me because I have found myself to learn more efficiently if classes are mainly for problem-solving and lectures do not take up the whole class time. It also offers a rigorous learning curriculum helping students to be able to apply theoretical knowledge to the real world which in today’s world is necessary to be prepared for the job market.”

is it too much or do I need something more?

Your first 2 sentences could be generically used for any college. Your next 2 sentences (especially the third sentence) provides a stronger “why” connection. I would lead with sentence 3 with edits to make it an appropriate leading sentence. With application essays, it’s important to “hook” the reader early.

It is a terrible idea to post your essay on this or any forum. Look at the top couple of posts pinned onto this thread. The essay could come up on a plagiarism check and/or your ideas can be stolen by another applicant. If you want it reviewed, ask for help and only send it to seasoned adult posters. IMO it is best to have an English teacher you trust read over your essays.

I’d flag the moderator and see if they can take the essay off of CC.