My Berkeley Essay... Help!

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<p>Will someone help me edit my UC-Berkeley app essay? I think it's really good but I might be missing a bit.</p>

<p>Here:</p>

<p>I be apleyeing to tha universiti of caforna berklee beecuz i am looking for a big collij that has a inviroment thats good got me study. I want go to caforna berklee beecuz it has swom palmetto of brick buildings after nazh or me to see! They for me tpo apply ineliglb but ik go 4 dreams becauze caforna berklee is my fewchure collij if tyo like my essay and acksept me into the caforna berklee. YTou have no idea what i got. I got so many skillsx i reed fst and annotyte ISAY IT! I want study medicine for caforna berklee but i mite change dat because caforna berklee has so many cjoiced wow! I dont know for iff i be changing becuz you know they say teenajers are alweays changing their minds HAHA! Welljst i dont kno if ill be quiiitee likew thayt nbut who knows, not me!
I'm readyo to live in dorms be respecful asnd behave trhat m,eens be nice to my roommater and not trash bjasically everything near me, not representin caforna berklee way to wundt.
Oh please acksept me to caforna berklee! I no k want to go to te collij by hosuew my mo said berklee no is for real tol me! ohno!
please let me in please please please please oh please please please please irerally wanna go please please please</p>

<p>Thankj caforna berklee!</p>

<p>....Do you think It's good? My AP English teacher looked it over and said It'll "definately make me stand out" in admissions. That's good, right?</p>

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<p>Are you kidding me? </p>

<p>An essay of that quality would get you accepted into Oxford, UCL, Cambridge, HYPS, Stanford, MIT etc. </p>

<p>Forget Berkeley! (Not too say it’s a bad school, it just seems that it’s a hairline behind the schools I mentioned.)</p>

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<p>^Yeah seriously, I agree with Bothwings. Your essay is killer, I can totally imagine Yele and Hahvard and Columbua accepting you just because of your essay. When I read your essay, all I saw was quality, depth, and all that other good ****. Good job :]</p>

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<p>i think you swallowed a lil too much shampoo. lawlz</p>

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<p>Lmao! ■■■■■…I only understood the first sentence of the post.</p>

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<p>I’ll be applying to the University of California Berkeley because I am looking for a big college that has a environment thats good for me to study. I want go to (University ) of California Berkeley…</p>

<p>I’ll get to the rest later…</p>